Bad Dialogue vs Good Dialogue ROUND 2 (Writing Advice)

Explore five new types of bad dialogue and learn how to fix them. Examples from Game of Thrones, The Dark Knight, The Godfather, Titanic, Star Wars, and more!

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0:00 Intro
0:27 Good Dialogue
1:32 Good Dialogue Example
2:18 Bad Dialogue
2:37 Name Calling
4:46 Preachy Dialogue
7:31 Filler Dialogue
9:47 Relentlessly Repeated Phrases
12:31 Clunky Comebacks
14:41 Outro
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[cerebrumexcrement]

idk what u talkin about. "hi doggy" and "ur my favorite customer." are some of the most iconic lines in movie history.

[FruitMeate]

I really thought the good example of a hero’s comeback was gonna be “Yeah, well, you know, that’s just like… your opinion, man”

[adamkashlak]

What Luke should've said is "well, that's just, like, your opinion, dad."

[NoriMori]

My favourite thing about that flower shop scene is that they both start their next lines and actions before the first person even finishes their own prerequisite line. And also that the flower shop lady knows who Johnny is, and even calls him her favourite customer, but somehow didn't know it was him when he came in.

[JohnDoe-zrpc]

For Titanic, I always figured it was Jack just panicking in the moment, but was trying to keep Rose focused, because if she panicked too, she probably couldn’t find the keys & they were both dead.

[clonedelta]

Not only does Luke not speak, but act. But his lightsaber powers on quickly, loudly and brightly. Indicating his brash, youthful cockiness. While Vader's, after a moment, hisses more subtly to life, the blade extending more slowly and in a slower, more deliberate motion than the quick flick Luke had done. Foreshadowing before the first attack of the fight that Luke is confident and young, but stands against a more powerful and experienced master.

[meganc]

And yet some rules are made to be broken. Case in point: an epic bit of dialogue that is on the nose, involves excessive name usage, and repeating the same phase over and over. And it starts: “Hello. My name is Inigo Montoya…”

[byucatch]

Every single line the Joker says in the TDK is brilliant writing. Can't convince me otherwise.

[Missionmoench]

Great dialogue #4 example would be in LOTR the fellowship between Boromir and Aragorn. Early on, boromir is clearly uncomfortable with Aragorn and says “Gondor has no King. Gondor NEEDS no King” this theme is played out between the two of them through the film, until, with his dying breath, Boromir turns to Aragorn and says “my brother. My captain. My king” such a powerful close.

[permixtg]

Just a small point on the use of names. Saying somebody's name repeatedly during a conversation is actually a manipulation tactic. It's used by scammers and salesmen all the time. It's a tactic to try and quickly build the facade of a bond and get you to trust them. So if used in that context I think it could bring a lot to a scene.

[PickledShark]

“You are my queen, I don’t know what else I can say!”

Man that last line is almost meta in it’s hilarity. 😅

[Ditronus.]

Best comeback of all time:

"Our arrows will blot out the sun!"

"Then we will fight in the shade."

[Ronno]

One of the better non-silent comebacks is also in "The Dark Knight":
Joker: "I like it when they fight back."
Batman (appearing on the scene): "Then you'll love me."

[eugeneimbangyorteza]

Almost any dialogue is better than 100 repetitions of "You are my queen"

[storiesimprovelives]

I love how in the scene with Luke and Vader, Luke drawing his lightsaber is basically his response to Vader telling him he’s not a Jedi. Then Vader drawing his lightsaber is his next attack against Luke, and the tension builds up until they finally start dueling.

[annajoiedavis]

Good Will Hunting has the best example of impactful line repetition with the "It's not your fault" scene.

[Gainzonthetable]

Great video Brandon, I liked Brandon how you mentioned Brandon that constantly saying someone’s name Brandon is unnatural and superfluous Brandon !

[tnexx]

Anybody else start dying seeing yoda say “yo Luke”

[slash]

I think a whole video could be made on Vader's line "The Force is with you, young Skywalker, but you are not a Jedi yet." So much implication and subtext in just that one line: "You have ample skill, but you have come here looking for a fight and you are overmatched."

So good. Gives me chills every time I see it.

[LuMartinelli]

Two lines of dialogue between Fredo and Michael and not only you already know everything about the dynamics of their relationship, but they also set the entire tone of the movie for anyone who never saw it. So masterful.