The Key to Writing Freakishly Good Dialogue | Video Essay

STORY CONSULTING:

MY PATREON:

MY KO-FI:

THE Q&A:

VIDEO CONTENTS:
00:00 - on scenes
1:46 - the filter
2:45 - I put too much effort into this part
8:41 - Skillshare (sponsored segment)
10:20 - avoiding the alleyoop line
13:00 - disagreement ≠ conflict
14:11 - on subtext
15:45 - "yes, and" thinking
17:03 - typa shi I been on
18:30 - patrons + outro

Shoutout Anna for voice acting in my silly little video.

[localscriptman]

The consultation thing is paused right now. There is no waitlist. I made this video when my channel was much smaller. If consultations come back, it will have to be a raffle of some kind. I cannot accommodate the thousands of people who want my help. Thanks 👽

[NaoyaYami]

I was about to comment about how insanely quickly I got invested in this Philip and Kima's drama but then the ad began and I couldn't stop laughing.

[auliamate]

Can we get an F in the chat for our girl Kima? Her man wasn't just leaving her for Icarus, but he is also a Skillshare salesperson. Completely devastating, and then he went and told her her jaw stank! Oh she must be in shambles, utter shambles!

[knockonwall]

"conflict is the state in which characters reveal things about themselves"
Is a great quote

[joanne]

i love that the fake dialogue looked just like something i could hear in a bad movie or read out of a shitty wattpad fic

[Eric-jhmp]

The fact that the ad read was so hilarious to me just shows how well the writing of that scene really draws you into these characters. That's so genius and I respect it soo much.

[iSimply_]

this is how you fucking teach.

explaining a premise, explaining why its used, showing what its like when it isnt used, and then showing what its like when it IS used.

if my English teacher thought this way, my stories in class would have been so much better.

[sabsdelgado]

This is the greatest sponsorship integration of all time

[donnieblue]

"I still remember the last words he ever said to me before walking out of my life forever."

"What did he say?"

"I-I can't, it still hurts to think about..."

Her therapist jotted down another note with a vacant expression. He pushed his glasses back up the bridge of his nose. "What did he say? The healing process can only begin once you've fully internalized the memories that have caused you such pain. What, did he say?"

She swallowed, grimacing as if the memory itself had a bitter taste.

"This... this video..."

The therapist leaned forward, his expression almost hungry with anticipation. "Finish it."

"This video... is sponsored by Skillshare..."

[aerie.the.artist]

"Not key moments connected by vibes. Scenes." That hit right in the feels, man😢

[rangamullet]

I was waiting for the scene to end with Phillip saying "No it wasn't" and then you hit us with something even more devastating, an adread.
You connected the audience to kimas feelings, we too are betrayed and told our investment in the scene wasn't real. good writing lol

[FabbrizioPlays]

You hammering home that "vibes don't write stories" in every video will single-handedly save an entire generation of writers, mark my words. It's such a legitimate epidemic.

[Zethin]

"This video is sponsored by Skillshare."

You did not just drive me to tears through an instructional exercise and then slap me with *that* 💀

[lmartinson]

The exposition between Phillip and Kima was really good. People are often annoyed by info dumps because they're intrusive or unrealistic, but sometimes people info dump in real life. Phillip was trying to avoid a serious discussion, and had interesting trivial to share. It was some of the most natural exposition I've heard, and it said as much about Phillip as about the world.

[Johnathonaaron]

I don't think i laughed as genuinely and deeply in the last year as when he said "this video was sponsored by skillshare". I don't know who you are, but you sir are a screenplay genius. Literally in tears right now.

[azureNotsure]

That sponsorship segment. That small section. That transition. That’s all I needed to see to know that you most definitely know how to write freakishly good dialogue

[arzabael]

“I don’t want it to be easy, I just want it to be real.” Good lord man. Chills covering me and tears wallowing. Good lord man.

[kingtut]

i'm not gonna lie my jaw kind of dropped when you mentioned the idea of putting emotional exposition through a human filter because i have been using that exact phrasing to describe this concept for years. before now i've never heard someone else describe it that way and it made me feel a little giddy to hear you use the same wording. i've had countless experiences on my own watching a movie and hearing a character explain how they're feeling in a way that doesn't feel natural or at all influenced by a subjective perspective and in my head i'm just like "bro forgot to put it through the filter 💀💀💀"

[bioleader]

As an autistic person, this has taught me that I somehow knew less about human people than I once thought.

[scs]

I was like for real feeling it on "I just want to know if it was real" and got slapped across the face with that ad read. Never been so close to tears to then be cackling like a jackal.