Do NOT Submit Your Common App Without Watching This!! | 7 Deadly Sins (by Yale 2020 grad)

Not clickbait. Here are the common application essay 7 deadly sins:

1. weak ash hooks
2. problem-solution ratio
3. things happening to you vs. you making things hapen
4. lack of specificity
5. no contribution to campus
6. no demonstrated personal growth
7. obvious insights

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[Azizaaly]

These are the 7 deadly sins that I commit in my common app essay.

You are doing great work. Thank you so much. Keep it up. You really deserve millions of subscribers.

Usually I don't write any comments. I write comments to your videos.

[alejandroquinterocashore]

Deadly sin #3 is so tempting! At a first glance, it would seem more logical to describe the circumstances and people who got you to where you are today. The 20, 60, 20 ratio is definitely a good way to make sure that you showcase what you can bring to a college.

[xNightxade]

It really is clear to me now that I need to be more conscientious about being more specific and detailed in my descriptions in order to really convey my character and processes, thank you!

[elevatedschool]

Hey guys! If you found this video even mildly entertaining or helpful, it would really mean the world if you considered liking and subscribing -- the channel is very small, so everything helps! 😇

[jacob-gcts]

Thank you Kevin! I'll make sure to watch out for these 7 Deadly Sins when I write my Common App. :)

[brendanc]

I can't believe this doesn't have more likes; this is so helpful!!

[Eli-gnkm]

I wish I had your videos when I was writing my applications lol; I'm looking back at my essays and seeing all the edits I would have made.

[theatregirl]

so helpful!! this makes me feel pretty good about my essay, all i’m struggling with is the hook. my essay is about my journey with makeup/eyeshadow palettes and how i went from someone who hid in the background to someone bold and self-confident because of my makeup. my first sentence is “i bought my first eyeshadow palette at the beginning of freshman year.” i kind of like it because it’s simplistic and unconventional, but it’s also not super exciting yk? but the rest of my essay seems to align with your advice though :)

[ndindakasyoka]

I legit clicked on your video just because of the seven deadly sins but this has been surprisingly insightful
I came looking for Copper but I found Gold!!
Thank you so much

[Jopzip]

I just want to say you are helping me so much with these videos. Columbia is my dream and the deadline is Nov. 1st!
This is a long shot but maybe you could look over my essay?

[EGG-dvcm]

I gave you a like! Thank you for donating to Girls Who Code, they were my first introduction to coding and I’m not sure I would be on the path I am now without them

[igntrollington]

Hi Kevinnn, thank you so much for your videos! Could you please maybe do one on the current Yale supplements if you have spare time? Alsooo side note, I remember reading your Quora answer about Exeter a few years back and seeing you on that Business Insider article hahahah!

[ayechanphyo]

Hello, Kevin!Thank you so much for your advice. Not sure if you remember, I commented and asked you about the college app review session and you sent me a link for that. I was wondering to when I would have my essays ready and tried to register a session today but, found that I couldn’t for this month as it is full.I am sorry I know you must be busy with all the registrations but, I really needed it so I wanted to make sure if there is any possibility for a college app review for this month from u?

[SuperDuperNonsense]

hey kevin! your vids have been super helpful to me and the discord server i'm in! would it be cool if we could meet again for last minute CA changes?

[makkeedahmitchell]

Hey Kevin I really liked your advice would you mind looking over my essay and giving me couple feed backs because honestly I have been struggling with this essay for months

[elevatedschool]

want me to take a look at your CA? schedule a time to chat here: bit.ly/botherkevin20 (this offer is valid until I hit 1000 subs). Rooting for you!!

[ElizabethJennifer-xh]

Hi kelvin, really love the content, can you help me review my essay, I've been struggling with it.

[babington]

Forget Lebron and MJ, this is my GOAT.

[sasikalat]

If my sub worth a million subs and then my fone go self destruction, I would still hit him twice on my new fone.

[anubh_]

Hey, could you please please help me to know about the admissions and essentials for IVY league or UK collages?
I'll be really really grateful to you.
Please help me 🙏