C1 Advanced (CAE) PERFECT C1 Advanced essay example! | Writing Workshop

I was asked to correct this C1 Advanced (CAE) essay, but it's already perfect... I had very few things to change to this essay, making it a perfect example of a C1 Advanced Essay. Learn how to write a C1 Advanced essay by studying this example!

What would you change to this essay?

Chapters
00:00 Introduction
00:13 Assignment
01:09 First glance at the essay
01:42 Perfecting the introduction
03:38 Perfecting Argument 1
08:38 Argument 2
14:04 Opinion and Conclusion
15:27 What makes this essay perfect?!
15:48 End

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[wagnermota]

I absolutely loved the video! Thank you so much ❤

[TeacherZdenek]

I have to say these are becoming my favourite videos. Nice one Mr. Henriques!

[GiC]

Thank you sir, I'm learning a lot.

[liliyamihaylova]

I have been told about formal essay writing is that you need to include examples, preferably from personal experience in each paragraph to prove your argument. The other thing is that you need to finish each paragraph of the body (2 and 3) with a concluding sentence that paraphrases the topic sentence. Do those not apply for CAE essay writing?

[edyly]

Hello appreciate your work very much. I was wondering why you change the structure of the introduction since I was thought that more advanced grammatical structures like inversions are gonna add more value to the essay?😅

[spiritualsoul]

Could you please make a video on wording, especially cutting down prepositions

[Vi.king]

Mr. Henriquez, thank you! And great vid. I hope you see my questions.

Do the prompts need to be similar in nature? What I mean if the first prompt was negative, should be second be as well? Vice versa, when it's positive.

For example,
Prompt 1 idea: Work is exhausting it drains the existence of oneself.
Prmopt 2: Culture denies individual identity. It tends to create a monolith approach.

I understand it's compare and contrast but I'm having a time fathoming the essence of the essay.
Would it be fine for the first prompt to be overwhelming whereas the second to be underwhelming?
I find it easier to do it this way. First prompt is overwhelming while the second is underwhelming.

I have recently learnt to use the PEEL approach towards my essays but I am concerned about the details. They're not a hundred percrent factual but there's just a little truth in it. I mean it's not fact checking right, but is that advisable?
In addition, what level of being specific should I do in each example I give to the prompt? I'm now knowledgeable that experiences don't count.

Also, I'm confused where to apply the compare and contrast part? Should I take it holistically? Or do I contrast prompt 1 and 2? And compare them in the conclusion with my insight?

[hempstockashley]

Thank you very much <3 I have gained quite a lot of useful expressions from this video <3

[thuvu]

I always struggle with writing task. Somehow I feel it’s harder than listening tasks... I’m practicing for C1 and have no idea if I can do it.