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Writing task 2, lesson 6: Opinion essay

Here’s the question and the full essay that you saw in the lesson:

The money spent by governments on space programmes would be better spent on
vital public services such as schools and hospitals.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Governments in some countries spend large amounts of money on space exploration
programmes. I completely agree with the idea that these are a waste of money, and that
the funds should be allocated to public services.
There are several reasons why space programmes should be abandoned. Firstly, it is
extremely expensive to train scientists and other staff involved with space missions, and
facilities and equipment also come at a huge cost to the government. Secondly, these
programmes do not benefit normal people in our daily lives; they are simply vanity projects
for politicians. Finally, many missions to space fail completely, and the smallest
technological error can cost astronauts their lives. The Challenger space shuttle disaster
showed us that space travel is extremely dangerous, and in my opinion it is not worth the
risk.
I believe that the money from space programmes should go to vital public services instead.
It is much cheaper to train doctors, teachers, police and other public service workers than
it is to train astronauts or the scientists and engineers who work on space exploration
projects. Furthermore, public servants do jobs that have a positive impact on every
member of society. For example, we all use schools, hospitals and roads, and we all need
the security that the police provide. If governments reallocated the money spent on space
travel and research, many thousands of people could be lifted out of poverty or given a
better quality of life.
In conclusion, my view is that governments should spend money on services that benefit
all members of society, and it is wrong to waste resources on projects that do not improve
our everyday lives.
(275 words, band 9)

Analyse the essay by completing the following tasks:
1. Count the sentences in each paragraph. Did I use my normal approach, writing 2
sentences for the introduction, 5 sentences for each main paragraph and 1 sentence for
the conclusion?
2. Highlight the linking words in each main paragraph. Which method did I use in each
one: ‘firstly, secondly, finally’ or ‘idea, explain, example’?
3. Underline the good vocabulary that I mentioned at the end of the video lesson.

Answers:
1. I did use my normal approach: 2 sentences, 5 sentences, 5 sentences, 1 sentence.
2. Linking in paragraph 2: firstly, secondly, finally, and, these, they
Linking in paragraph 3: furthermore, for example, and
Paragraph 2 has a ‘firstly, secondly, finally’ structure because we had 3 separate ideas.
Paragraph 3 contains one main idea, so we explained it in detail and gave an example.
3. See the video lesson.

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Thank you sir Simon. Your method helps me so much. Btw, this is my essay with the view of disagreement ^^

Nowadays, humans are ambitious to explore outer space more than ever before, and some people argue that governments should spend national funds on certain public services instead of space programmes. I completely disagree with this view.

I believe that projects which help people to uncover the mystery of the universe are very crucial. All human beings have a mission to discover outer space to broaden our wisdom and prepare for future development. Thanks to space projects in the past, humans gained more knowledge about the solar system, the Milky Way galaxy, and so on. Furthermore, in recent years, many scientists have been exploring the Moon and other planets with the ambition of giving humans some other places to live in the future.

When it comes to public services, I believe that governments always have reasonable plans. And they definitely know what is the priority that they need to consider first. For example, space programmes are usually taken by rich countries that have enough financial resources. In developing countries, society-supporting services are always considered more important.

In conclusion, space exploration is an essential part of human lives, and it is worth it to be given financial resources by governments.

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claflinhuangishere

Thanks for your job Simon, but I still have a doubt with this kind of question like"Discuss both view and give your opinion", should I have got to show advanages of both opinions or just write down the diasavantages of which I dont agree with?

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