IB English: Paper One - Political Cartoon - Student Sample - FULL RESPONSE - SCORE 7

This student scored 7 on a recent Paper One. Let's look at the response, highlight her paper, and learn from her!

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POLITICAL CARTOON AND HIGHLIGHTED STUDENT RESPONSE

[kexingarianali]

it's just scary to know my schoolmates are capable of writing such great essays in such limited time...

[omplat]

Was this written during the actual IB exam, or was it an assignment? I find it extremely difficult to believe that this was written during the paper 1 IB exam, as it's way too sophisticated and has too many words for a one-hour task; in fact, I asked my teacher and he thinks the exact same thing. He said that the standards aren't this high for a 7.

[EllhamNasser]

Can you do a video responding to a not so good grade and explain how to avoid mistakes ?

[prata]

I was advised not to include knowledge not already present in the text. But i noticed you guys seem to bring it up quite often when discussing the different texts. So are we allowed to bring in outside knowledge of the issue/topic other than what's presented in the text?

For example, you guys bring up the use of the colour red, and how that relates to the red and blue states in America. Are we allowed to do that in the essay? Cus if someone doesn't follow American politics, they might not know what red and blue states are.

[DJTejasMusic]

Knowledge of context is no longer graded on paper 1. Using external information might very well develop your arguments but we're supposed to develop arguments based on what is in the text, not outside it. Furthermore, irrespective of how good language used in the paper is, repeating the message instead of evaluating the techniques that develop it will probably not score well on the IB :)

An analysis like the one you just showed is nearly impossible without significant contextual understanding, which isn't a requirement.