The most beautiful melody I composed.

melody in Eb (op.8 no.2)

[mudosan]

Even if the piece is mainly on major key, it makes me feel sadness for some reason. It's like, you had fun and very good memories, but they are all remain in the past and now the friends you made are no more by your side, all you can do is thinking about those good memories and feel nostalgic by yourself, all alone.

[ClassicalMusiKenthusiastRS]

For some reason this gives me the vibe of something that would be in a ToyStory movie or maybe a Studio Ghibli movie. Idk I just feel lots of childhood wonder as well as loss in this piece... Great job, keep composing, you're a great inspiration.

[excelgames]

This sounds like someone looking back down at their gameboy after years of not playing and they spawn into their favorite town.

[TheAbsoluteProduction]

Great piece! I love the progression. The ending reminds me of Rachmaninoff romance piece. Keep it up!

[bagggyy]

This is a pretty good melody indeed, good job!

[АлексейБенецкий-шр]

Много чувства прекрасного передаётся в отрывках вашей мелодии. Отличная работа, продолжайте сочинять. С ростом вашего мастерства, вы будете уже создавать концептуальные вещи, где всё произведение есть единая мысль или чувство, которое вы хотели раскрыть в себе и подарить другим

[minefan]

Restating the motif two octaves above at the end has a really unique effect, like the original version was the “remembering of memories” other people describe this piece as feeling like, and this higher version is acknowledging that those are gone now

[chickennoob]

This piece clearly demonstrates thoughtful, organic structure, and the melody is very elegant too
Yet I believe that the harmony can be more developed and have more variation. Also, working on voice leading can refine your piece a lot more.
Firstly, I suggest you should add pedal indicators to the score as I believe the dry texture demonstrated in the midi is far from your imagination and the sound should be dreamier and thicker. If you do want to retain not to add indicators to the score, I suggest you add the indicators first then turn it invisible (I believe that MuseScore has this feature but I mainly use Sibelius so I can’t tell you the exact method)
Secondly, there’s some simple fix of notes that I suggest:
Bar 2, 4 and a half beat, lower staff: Change from Db to Bb. As the Right hand is doing an 8-7 motion and the LH keep the 7, it will cause a double of 7 which impedes the resolution from V/IV to IV. Remember to avoid double tendency notes except writing for a thick texture. This apply to all cases
Bar 4, 3rd beat, Lower staff: Change the inversion of the Eb chord to first inversion. It can create more variation and an amazing arpeggiating bass line of Eb Eb/G Bb
Bar 5, 3rd beat, Lower staff: Delete the 3 notes after Bb. The diatonic descending scale is not harmonious when combined with the chromatic descending thirds. Also, leaving the bass line out can really make the colour of the chromatic scales shines
Bar 7, 3rd beat, Lower staff: Change the Cb to Eb. The Cb acts as a tendency note when you are trying to do C-Cb-Bb voice leading for this borrowed iv. So doubling the Cb causes dissonance.
Bar 8, 1st bar: change the inversion of chord from root to second. Using root position mostly signifies an end of a phrase, especially when you use it after a very powerful borrowed iv. However, the phrase does not end until the perfect cadence in bar 9, and a normal phrase model follows Tonic-Predominant-Dominant structure, you are cutting the phrase model off. Changing the chord to the second inversion has two functions: 1. it can form a cadential 64 which augments the power of the perfect cadence, 2. As the Cadential 64 is considered as an embellishment of the dominant, the entire phrase fulfills phrase model.
Bar 8, 3rd beat, Lower staff: The Bb-C-D-Eb change to Bb(same as RH)-A-Ab-G. If you are doing parallel octaves, we consider that as only one voice. Yet looking back your writing, you mostly use melody with accompaniment that has 3 layers of voices, a total of 4 voice. Suddenly change from 4 voices to a single voice without exaggeration in dynamics causes awkwardness. By writing another chromatic downward counterpoint, you are achieving: 1. Reducing the reduction of voices from (4 to 1) to (4 to 2), reducing awkwardness; 2. Creating a complex colour that can rival the thickness of 4 voices, making the entire music more coherent; 3. It still reduce the voice, so it can be the preparation to the syncopation in octaves you have written.
I guess there’s a lot of amendments you can consider already, but I guess this piece is a very meaningful achievement for u. As I may have mentioned some terms too difficult, feel free to ask me
(Edit: This is the first time I listen to you. I just look back your other pieces you composed and I see a stunning improvement in this piece as you try to use more complex harmony! Keep it up)

[SWAGGBOYONLY]

I really enjoy this piece! You know how to write a melody. Keep going, I can’t wait to see you keep growing as a composer!

[santiagomartinezvargas]

The accompaniment sounds like a beautiful little rag ❤

[spectrumstar]

Don't worry about the criticism :) you're 15 and doing such a wonderful job, I admire your creativity :D Keep progressing!

[Hffmelo]

Although it seems ‘happy’, for some reason it feels like your back in your childhood but then you realise that this is not going to last long, cause u are not a child anymore, it is all just ur dream

[mohee]

for me its pretty sad idk why. Like a sad ost in an anime, or in a movie.

[ThatOneGuy.]

I agree, the piece is fun, sad, laid-back and jazzy, all at the same time.

[pjotrkolster]

This is a pretty neat piece! It does have some really nice heartwrenching moments. :)

[bole]

could you share the sheet? its absolutely beautiful and i'd love to play it

[bendavidson]

Those 6th notes in those 8th note triplets should just be sextuplets

[beginneratstuff]

The accompaniment in the left hand and syncopated rhythm in the right hand makes it sound like a ragtime piece. Correct me if I'm wrong; I'm still learning. It's a nice little melody. The piece uses the minor IV chord nicely to get that classic emotional sound. The triplet rhythms in the second half are a nice change of pace.

[Mauroforte]

I see something deep and simple at the same time and i really like it. At the beginning seemed to be bink's sake by one piece 😁
Keep up the work!

[brunaangelica]

Muito lindo, traz algo nostálgico... Uma incrível melodia. Parabéns 👏👏