common app essay that got me accepted to the ivy league + tips | upenn

common app essay that got me accepted to an ivy league school!
i applied to the university of pennsylvania back in november for early decision and i was lucky enough to get in in december!
hopefully, this video helps you guys in some shape or form. if its good, here's some inspiration. if it's bad, you got yourself a great example of what not to do and maybe it'll show you that you don't need a great essay to get into a great school!
feel free to comment if you want me to read your essay and give you some advice! id be happy to give my 2 cents :)
best of luck!

[haleykang]

hey guys! im so glad so many of you guys are finding my essay helpful! unfortunately, i decided to stop editing essays sent to me because it's been taking up a lot of my time. i never expected to get so many requests and especially with the school year coming up, i want to focus on enjoying the time i have left up until the fall and getting ready to do my best! hope you guys understand :)

[easton]

I feel that I'm never going to have that "spark" in my essay. I have no cool achievements and especially with quarantine I have no opportunities. I had so much planned for this year. Re-join track, join the robotics club, get involved in leadership programs, try to create a club with my friends etc. Now, something just as simple as keeping up my grades is difficult. I hate being trapped in this 10 by 11 room

[tsiyong]

This is by far the best common app essay I have heard and trust me I’ve watched quite a lot of videos lol!

[riyab]

Your essay was incredible!! It was so refreshing to see your metaphor weaved into the essay throughout. But I'm so nervous I haven't even started yet😭

[saychu]

I’m a senior rn and I haven’t even started my college applications...

[sophiebazydola]

this was so helpful!! I've been so lost over where to start with my essay and seeing someone who is more "normal" and doesn't have any crazy life experiences was so refreshing, thank you for this video!!

[rubikashree]

That was such a mindboggling transition from making cookies to debating in another country.

girl

my jaws have been dropped

[shoedogodo_]

I'm currently a high school senior working on my application. Out of all the common app essays, I liked yours the most. I really liked how you stayed relatable while keeping your essay structure fresh and unique!

[sabamehrzad]

loved your essay! i thought that starting off with the puzzles was so cool because it was a literal passion of yours and can be used metaphorically when learning about your own life! :)

[daralau]

thank you so much for sharing! i was having such a difficult time working with ideas that i really didn't care about or didn't feel connected to. when you said you made a list of everything that you would do if you had all the time in the world was something i actually forgot to think about and now i'm coming up with so many good ideas and am feeling so much for confident!! :) and congrats on UPenn!!

[sambam]

“July before senior year” Me: *stresses bc its December 22nd OF SENIOR YEAR and the deadlines are February 1st*😳

[vic]

This is the best essay video I have ever seen and I have been binging these kinds of videos for, well, a long time. Thank you

[virajtayshete]

Loved how you stayed raw and real. One of those few essays that never really feels boring even after reading it a couple of times

[tiramisu]

thank you so much for offering your advice—as someone who has also watched a lot of these college videos, i found it rlly refreshing to hear the perspective of someone more 'normal'. i really like the way your essay conveyed your personality and i got a lot of insight on how i should approach my own essay from this! congrats on upenn and looking forward to your college vlogs :)

[morri_]

Your essay is so amazing, I love everything about it, the word choice creativity and humor can really make me know who you are!! I am writing my common app right now your essay really did give me inspiration to processed with mine:)

[Astrogrrl]

I’m a senior right now and now I’m regretting waiting till now to start writing my essay 😖

[milkbread]

You are so articulate, Haley. Like someone else commented, the way your puzzle metaphor was worked into the essay is impressive. Also, you give off a really friendly and humble vibe. Thank you for this video.

[khaingwailwin]

I have been struggling with my personal essay for the whole week, writing at least 3 topics but couldn't find anything that resonates with me. I found your video really helpful. I love your essay so much. I don't find it cliche. Thank you for your video and keep up the great work. ✨

[ShristiGhimire]

omg your essay is making me sooo nervous! how can someone write sooo good? loads of love! happy to find your channel

[bellesee]

I absolutely love the essay and the way you wrote it as it just felt so modest and personal yet flawless and well-crafted.